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mitsur 03-20-2002 01:00 AM

The tradegy
 
This is preview of the upcoming story

As Alex was walking through the forest trying to catch meat for his tribe(Kabutu tribe)he noticed somthing unusal glitering on the ground....

mitsur 03-20-2002 10:26 PM

"What the heck?"Alex said."It's sword!!"So Alex picked it up and felt energy flowing through him

dark_xinos 03-22-2002 04:10 PM

I asume that Alex is a mudokon... A magic sword! Cool!

mitsur 03-24-2002 07:33 PM

This took me awile but PM me ideas if you have some!:fuzblink:
I ask one person to vollenteir to help just ask me.(I would perferr Dragodon because she's soooo good though)

Prologue

It has been to years from that day Alex found that sword,but he still keeps it with him everywhere he goes.This night somthing terrible will happen and this is where it will begin...........

Chapter 1
Friend ship with a parimite

Alex was walking through the area not really paying attention to anything so he did'nt notice the dark shadow watching him through the trees."lalalala"Alex humed alittle.What a great day!
Alex thought looking at the clear blue sky above him.Suddenly somthing jumped out and started to hiss at him."hisshisssss"the parimite mother said."Yummy!I can bring it home for my favorite,parimite chicken fingers!(:D )"Alex said and pulled out his sword.Alex thought hard and charged a quater of his energy into the sword."Now die!"Alex yelled(It may sound cruel but his tribe would starve alot without him)and killed the mother."Dang it!!!!! killed another mother!Thats the third time in 4 days!!!(;) )But then he heared a tiny squeaking noise."Awwww...its a parimite baby"Alex said and took it in to care for.

mitsur 03-25-2002 12:11 PM

Chapter 2:

Returning home


Alex decided to call the baby parimite Mac.As he and Mac walked home with a scrab body they had found hiding behind the trees.But when they returned the people there went crazy."YOU IDOIT ALEX!!!!"screamed the people"THAT IS A BABY PARIMITE!THE FATHER WILL COME KILL US WHEN HES SEE THE NEST EMPTEY!""opps!"said Alex"but I need to tell you that I killed the father last week"

A few minutes later......

"mmmmm!This is good!"Alex said munchin' on a scrab cake.When do I have to go to get firewood again? Alex thought Oh yeah right now So he went to find some firewood. Once he had gotten some firewood,he heared a explosion."What the h*** was that!?"Alex said


Whoohoo! 301 posts!

Al the Vykker 03-25-2002 10:48 PM

good story so far! keep it up!:D

mitsur 03-25-2002 10:51 PM

Okay now i'm ready for chapter 3!

Chapter 3

Can I ever live through this?

As soon as he got back,Alex saw mudokons running away."Huh?"
Alex said"Whats happining?".So he ran to his fathers house only to see his parents cliging to life."NNOO!"Alex said and rushed to his parents with the baby parimite after him."Son,somthing attacked us without warning....Ughh....please run while you can but save your mother...ugghhhhhhhh"and Alex's father died.(:( )
Tears silently went down Alex's checkss."Who would do this?"he said.And ran to save his mother but like his father,was barley alive."Alex take our family jewel to remeber us and run!uuggghhhh"and she to,died.Alex put the jewel in his belt poket and ran.Suddenly a HUGe blast of light hit the village and destroyed everything in its path."NO!!"Alex yelled as his village was blown to oblivion.

mitsur 03-26-2002 12:24 PM

I would like somone to compliment this!:fuzblink:

If you have ideas E-mail me because my inbox is screwed

mitsur 03-28-2002 08:13 PM

Come on people reply!


Chapter 4

Why did he do that??!!

Out of the corner of his eye,Alex saw movement."Hold it right there!"Alex yelled."It's late!hehehehehe!"said the mstery mudokon."Hey!I know you!You are the cheif of a tribe!"
With no one in it hehehe thought Alex."Why did you do that?!"Alex said"I was jelous!You people with comfort and happiness and me with nothin'" "Thats not a very good reason!" Alex said."I don't care!You go and weep some more!"the tribe-guy said.And with that,he dessipered.

mitsur 03-31-2002 02:45 AM

Will somone please reply?Please!I need help with this story!

Al the Vykker 03-31-2002 03:12 PM

What would you like me to help with Mitsur stealing my post count!? I'm just kidding what would you like me to help with?:)

mitsur 03-31-2002 04:37 PM

You can bring a person in now!:)

Mudokon Hawker died in a car crash to let you know:(

MunchOnThis 03-31-2002 04:52 PM

He's dead?? Oh I'm so sorry. I didn't know. R.I.P Mudokon Hawker, though I didn't know him, I wish him well...wherther he is.....:( :(

Al the Vykker 03-31-2002 11:03 PM

Oh my god...... how did you find out thats terrible:( :( :(

Al the Vykker 04-01-2002 12:55 PM

Chapter Five the Lost Slig



Joe the slig was just walking down the trail he had walked thousands of times before.


"HEHEHEHE"

He heard giggling he cocked his rifle.


" Who's there!" Joe inquired.


Joe heard it again he looked into the bushes. But nothing was there. Man, must be another one of those damn hint flies. Joe headed forward back to his camp site.


"PSST.......SmokinBS" Joe tried to communicate to his lost suad of sligs.

" ........................................" Nothing responded.

" Damnit!" Joe screamed.

He was lost for the time being, he would have to search in the morning. He set up his Bunk And put his mechanical pants inside the trunk. Joe would have to search again tommorrow.......


Is that good Mitsur?;) :)

mitsur 04-01-2002 10:09 PM

Yeah!I will PM you my idea for the next chapta!

Chapter 6

Who the hell is that slig?

Alex was sadley walking through the forest looking down with only the baby parimit to comfort him."So this is what it feels like to be half-alone"Alex said sadly.Suddenly,he tripped over something hard."What the h-....."But he did'nt finish his sentance."Oh my odd!Its a slig!"Alex said."What do you want?"Alex said."I would like to kill you for waking me up"the slig said jumping up with a sword.(This one hates guns.He thinks they our useless)Alex took his sword out."I don't want to fight,but with no choice,I will"Alex said.

Al the Vykker 04-02-2002 01:18 AM

Chapter 7


Joe meets Alex
( in a bad way )



" Freeze! " Joe yelled


He cocked the rifle and began shooting at the Mudokon who had stumbled upon his camp. The mud dodged the bullets that were flying, and his pet paramite jumped into the bushes.


" Why won't you die!" Joe screamed.


Joe was out of ammo in the clip, so he went to fight the Mud in combat. Suprising within a few minutes Joe was down for the count. And he awoke to a Baby Paramite licking his face.........


That good?

mitsur 04-02-2002 11:34 AM

Yes thats good Al!

mitsur 04-03-2002 12:19 PM

Chapter 8

Talking

"So who are you?"Alex said to the slig as he passed him a hot liqud."Well I lost my unit and my name is Joe"Joe said."My names Alex.My village was blown oblivion by this idiotic guy"Alex said."Do you want to help me find somthing to revive my people?"
Alex asked."I don't have a reson so...no"Joe said."I thought you would help because your unit is dead I found them back there".

400 posts!

Teal 04-03-2002 12:21 PM

:

Originally posted by mitsur
[B](I would perferr Dragodon because she's soooo good though)
Another vote of confidence, how nice.

Al the Vykker 04-03-2002 06:10 PM

Chapter 9

How can this be happening





Joe had aterrified look on his face.


" How do you know that was my unit!?" Joe forcefully asked.


" Calm down Joe i'm trying to help you," Alex replied.


" Odd damnit! Why can't you give me a straight answer!" Joe demanded

"I'll show you the bodies."


Alex Mac and Joe ventured some time away and Alex showed him the dead sligs of his squadron. Joe was devasted, and in turn he ran the opposits direction.

" Where are you going Joe?"
" Joe?

MunchOnThis 04-04-2002 06:02 AM

Need Help????
 
:

Originally posted by mitsur
Will somone please reply?Please!I need help with this story!
Do you want me to assist you along with Al???? I'll help if you like...