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KintoKeeper 10-01-2010 08:34 AM
Yarricks followers
 
YEAH im making a sequel to my 1st story :D hope ya like it

KintoKeeper 10-01-2010 08:46 AM
CHAPTER 1 somethin smells

Munch and Yarrick were walking (and hoping) to a town known as Thunder Stone.To their surprise Abe was there ''Abe old buddy you sly git!''Munch yelled ''Aww shucks''Abe replied.Yarrick was not abble to see Munch and Abe because he was surrounded by Muds.
''What the...who are they?'' Yarrick called ''Ehhhm Yarrick old pal the muds sorta took a shine to ya,''Abe told him.''Oh...cool,''Yarrick said then the muds walked off ''YARRICK'' ''YEAH WOOO'' they called out.''SPEECH SPEECH SPEECH!!!!!!'' they called ''Ehh how bout we meet at good ol Alfs and get some tea and ill give out a speech!''Yarrick told them ''THAT,ELL WORK!'' ''YEAH GO YARRICK.

KintoKeeper 10-01-2010 08:47 AM
I know the title of the chapter is mis-leading sorry.

Dynamithix 10-01-2010 10:07 AM
You could use the edit -button down there to avoid double/tripleposting.

Anyways, you should try improving your text style a bit. Noticed some words-right-after-dots -cases there, and make a longer one next time. ;)