Failure to Comply( my newest Fanfic )
 

Since I finished The Fallen Temple I decided to start my next fanfic.


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4000 years before Abe began his Oddysee, the world of Oddworld was a much different place. Above the continent of Mudos was a continent of splendor and glory in the prime of the Planet. When mudokons were guardians of peace, and Glukkons were a peaceful people, well most of them. And sligs were sligs. But what was feared the Most were in the shadows the darkness that would lead Oddworld's finest cities and towns, and inhabitants back to the Stone age.................

That sounds cool Al can't wait! By the way did you get my e-mail the other day? It has an attachment which is a picture of Blarg.:fuzblink: :) ;)

Sounds really good Al!!! I can't wait!!!
Oh my story is updated with a new character by the way!!!
:D

great, looking forward for more!

Chapter 1


Double Cross



Derec was headed for the east platform where the deal was to take place, but he could only for now see the shape of a figure standing with a brief case. Derec arrived and met the informant.


" Do you have the transmitter?" The Chronicler Inquired.

" Let me see the money first." Derec Replied.

" I think not."


At that moment three sligs surrounded Derec. The Chronicler then replied:


" I guess that concludes our buisness." And took the Transmitter from a stunned Derec, then turned to get into his shuttle.

Derec sensing more than just a buisness deal gone wrong jumped in the air and removed his sword from his robe and slashed the sligs in one tome around.

Derec knew he had to find who was behind this latest threat. He looked back and saw more security who had been called, and were ready to fight. But Derec had other intentions. he began to run for the fleeing shuttle and used his Abilities to jump even higher and faster.

His plan was successful and he attached himself to the shuttle and hung from a distance, not entirely sure where he was headed.




It gets better trust me........;) :)

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I like it Al that was exciting for the first chapter. I can't wait for more! Plus I like how you are useing Chroniclars in your story. Oh and thanks for sending me that pm. I thought you dident recieve my picture of Blarg so I was kind of wondering if you had it. thats cool. If you want I can draw up my other characters and creatures of Conquest. I just need to go ahead and draw them.
:fuzblink: :) ;) :smokin:

Bravo!!!! That was great!!! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!! :) :D :)

i enjoy readin these storys better than goin to the store, they are just as good

How come i never get this many replies in my Fics!! lol!!

Chapter 2 Night Life




Derec continued to hold on to the shuttle as it lifted into the evening sky. As it lifted the traffic was getting denser. Derec nearly missed an air taxi flying right by.


The only thing Derec could think about was that he had to get the brief case back. The Glukkon high council needed enough evidence of a large smuggling operation taking place in the city.


The shuttle landed near a restaurant well known to the populance. the chronicler exited his shuttle and entered, while derec detatched the cable from his belt he raised his hood on his cloak and kept his sword hidden, as he also entered the restaurant.


The chronicler was about to sit down as Derec put the sword up to the chronicler's neck.


" I believe you have something that belongs to me. "


" I won't tell you anything!" The chronicler spit back.

" sit down, now!" Derec commanded.

The chronicler took a seat at the booth, while Derec sat across from him.


" all I know was that I was contacted via hologram to deliver the transmitter, I swear thats all I know." The chronicler said.

" I 'm going to bring you to the high council, they will read your thoughts."................................

Chapter 3 The Council Chambers




Derec followed by the chronicler landed at the temple shrine where THe Glukkon High Council, along with the Mudokon guard was located. Derec escorted the Chronicler to the top floor where the two were greeted by the Council.

The Glukkons wear traditional capes around their necks flowing down their backs, on the back depicts a three fingered hand on a moon sewn beautifully. None wear buisness suits.


" Welcome Chronicler we have been expecting you." Yslam the Head coincil member said.


" Uh.....uh....hello." the Chronicler responded.


" He was the informant, and claims he was contacted by hologram." Derec shared with the council.


The Council then peared deep within the chronicler's mind probing it for any further information.


" The Chronicler is free to go, nothing more he has for us."

Another Hooded Mud escorted him out. The council told Derec to remain. In the distance Oddworld's sun set behind the magnificent city, as the lights of large skyscrapers lit up. Traffic was busy as usual.


" Derec we need you to investigate further and see what else is going on, beside the smuggling of transmitters and portable devices."

" I will began tommorrow." Derec Replied

" Rest well."


Then the council a jurned and returnded to their private sleeping quarters. Derec went back to the bunk where he met up with his friend Chris went into his slepping quarters also. Derec removed his clothes, and hung up his sword and cloak.

Then he too entered his bunk in the wall. And locked his cell. Derec's eyes closed and he drifted to sleep./

Wow dude this is so cool. I like how you are useing a futureristic view of Oddworld. That is very interesting. Keep up the good work! This kind of reminds me of Star Wars hehe! Thats great!:fuzblink: :fuzcool: :) :D :lol: :smokin:

Tahts the idea I sorta based it on, before the GLukkons rose to power, before they hated the mudokons.

Chapter 4 a deadly mission.



Derec awoke rested, and refreshed. he climbed out of the tube and put his loin cloth on. Before he put is cloak on he meditated. And fenced inside his quarters. Yslam entered.


" greetings Derec, I trust you had a good nights rest."

" Yes, I actually did"

" I'm glad to hear that."

Derec put his robe on and the two left the sleeping quarters. Yslam told Derec that they lost Contact with one of their Mud guards, out on the Forest Labratories. Derec would have to infiltrate and see what was taking place their.

Derec agreed with Yslam and decided he would leave the city for this mission. The two took an elevator down to the hanger, and Yslam escorted Derec to his scout fighter.

" Be careful Derec, I have a bad feeling about this." Yslam said.

" I'll be carfefull." Derec replied.

His ship took off out of the hanger as dawn was breaking in the city. But soon the city was vanishing and more wildlife was coming into view, all Derec could think about was the Name of the continent he was headed to, Mudos.

Chapter 5 Mudos


Derec's fighter was zooming over the dense forest land, dereccould not believe his eyes. He had never in his lifetime seen so much wild life. He could only remember large skyscrapers, and tall buildings, along with the Council chambers Hq for the Mudokon guard.

Derec looked at his view screen and looked for info about this continent. Some included wild life, such as Vykkers, which lived in the trees, Scrabs, Meeches, Paramites, and others, like meetles.

Derec was also suprised to hear that their were native muds, and and native Glukkons. He decided to land in a clearing in the forest. It had been hours until he had finally entered into mudos air space, actually a five hour trip in even a fast ship such as Derec's.

He climbed out of the cockpit, and looked around. He could hear noises from inside the canopy of the forest. According to his info he was in Paramonia. Derec put his radio head set on and reported in.


" Yslam, this is Derec I have reached Mudos, and am inside aa large forest" Derec said.

" Keep investigating " Yslam said.

great chapters keep it up! :fuzsmile:

great chapters al your a good writer keep it up:fuzblink: :D :fuzcool:

Chapter 6 Forest Canopy




Derec stepped out of the fighter and entered the dense forest. The first thing that caught his attention was the strange animals drinking from the stream, they appeared to be some sort of riding like creatures.

According to Derec's analysis the creature was called an Elum. He went up to this strange creature, and tried to mount it but was thrown off. Derec hit his head on the tree and got up again he decided to leave this creature alone.


" How can a beast as dumb as you survive in a world such as this!" Derec told the Elum.



But Derec knew the animal could never understand what he was saying. Along the forest wall Derec found a pulley elevator and decided to find where it lead. To his suprise the Pulley went straight up.

But when he arrived at the top of the canopy he pulled his hood down. And found a research facility that was completely hidden from the rest of the world. Derec walked up to the entrace gate which was sealed by electronic blast doors, to try and find his way inside.

Instead the doors opened and a bright white light blinded Derec and he lost conciousness.

That was a cool chapter interesting facility for what? I guess I will find out later. Hey have you seen Episode 2 yet? I saw it twice already that was great!:fuzblink:

Chapter 7 A mystery in itself




Derec in suspended animation dreamt, of a future danger approaching the horizon. He witnessed a great battle, and the destruction of the city he lived in, the sky had turned black and the sun was blocked by an eclipse.

Derec awoke unable to see clearly. He looked through the fog and realized he was trapped inside a glass tube. He could barely make out the figures who were observing, his still, unclothed body. They appeared to be scientists of some sort that were discussing something about him.

He atempted to hit the glass, as the scientists in the white lab coats stared curiosly at this attenpt of communication. Derec finally recognized who they were, he had read a profile on the beings known as Vykkers.

They whispered something to Derec as though to talk to him, then they touched a button on the control panel and released the tube. Derec stumbled out, and the Vykkers kindly lifted his body up.

" Don't be frightened, Derec we knew you were coming. We will escort you to your room we have much to discuss." The Vykker said to Derec as the others followed.

"Bu....." Derec mumbled.

" Do not worry Derec everything will be fine, everything will be revealed about your purpose to us. We are very blessed with you here, it is fortunate you have come now."


The Group followed into the organic hallways of the facility, with millions of suspended creatures watching from thier tubes. Derec had know idea what was in store for him next.......

This is really getting to be really interesting. Keep it up!:fuzblink:

Im most likely going to split this story into two parts with twenty chapter each. I will be updating as you do once a week starting tommorrow. Until twenty chapters are done. Then I will start a new fan fic. Then I will update this story with the last twenty chapters. Confusing, but I need to fit in time for other things too.

Check back soon!:) :fuzwink: :fuzcool:

you should put this story on alcar's fan fics

I have to comment on the story. it is brilliant i love it .:D keep it up Al. two thumbs way up:fuzsmile:

Chapter 8 A strange turn


Derec awoke on the forest floor surrounded by other mudokons they appeared to be trying to talk to him they lifted him up and brought him with them.

The group of muds followed the path through the forest until they came to a guarded fortress, a village known as Zarcyn, they appeared friendly and thought Derec was one of the tribes, Mudokon residents.

Derec was still confused he couldnt remeber who he was or what he was doing here, like he was in a dream he could not awake from. All he remembered was that he awoke surrounded by these native Muds.

They left Derec to sleep in the sleeping quarters. Though as Derec slept, memories, from his mind came into play, he could not remember what they were but they were flashing in his mind, a Maginficent city he once lived in, the sprawling metropolis he enjoyed so much.

Then he remembered entering a facility where he was being studied, then escorted to a room, where the doctors talked with him, after that all memory stopped until he had awoke in the forest and discovered.

Derec not even knowing that was his name struggled to remember, what those images were and what they meant.

What could this possibly mean for Derec? This now may endager his mission on Mudos, will he remember who he is...........

stay tuned.

Bravo this is another original my friend! bravo!:fuzblink:

Hey pal s'up what's happening.....Oh gawd..Great story ja??
 

Hey pal I've not seen you for a while. One things for sure I'm back and I'm hopefully here to stay. Anyhow back to topic, once again man great story keep up the good work!!

*does a little jig*

~Munchy :fuzcool:

Cool!,
IT is very good.

Look for an update later tonight. Stay tuned.

Chapter 9 The Shroud of Darkness begins to Fall

Mean While in the city of Mudarc........

Dusk was upon the grand city of Mudarc. The Oddworldian Sun was setting past the skyscrapers, as the darkness of night fell. The city lit up all at once, as the traffic was getting dense as usual.

Yslam the head of the Glukkon High council, stepped into his office, as the sun was setting he peered through the windows, seeing over everything as the Oddworld moon depicted on there ceremonial capes, came into view, the three fingered hand, seen as always.

One thing was still on Yslam's mind, why hadnt Derec reported in, the past week. He began to be worried, what could have happened, Mudos was still a new continent that hadnt been fully explored yet.

Though what happened next was odd indeed, and very unexpected.

A small hologram appeared, on Yslams desk, he sat down in his throne of the high council, and listened to what the hologram said. Not only did the hologram begin to speak, the hologram was of a hooded glukkon.

Most of this glukkon's face was hidden except for the glowing red eyes, he was wearing a hooded Black robe, and told Yslam something, that he said was important information to the Glukkons.

" Yslam leader of the Glukkon High Council, I come to speak to you of the truth about the moon we worship........."

"What is it," Yslam inquired.

"I will tell you when I meet with you in person..." the hooded glukkon responded. meet me tonight on the balcony outside your office........., I will meet you there within the hour........."


What is the information about, and who is this Glukkon.......Stay tuned, and also find out how Derec is doing,

look later this week for another update.

Great Al i cant wait to see what happens..This is getting good:fuzsmile: Keep it up..wonderfull story Bud:fuzgrin:

Chapter 10 The Shadow's Arrival

An hour had passed, Yslam was awaiting on the Balcony outside of his office. He felt the cool evening breeze blow by, as shuttles, and taxis whizzed past and weaved in between the skyscrapers.

In the distance, one of the Chronicler Class Shuttles, arrived on the platform, where last week the meeting between Derec, and the Chronicler took place. Although, when the ramp lowered, it was not a Chronicler that stepped out.

A Glukkon in Black Robes, with his hood up proceded down followed by a few Sligs, also in robes, though they had their hoods down instead. The proceded, towards, the private taxi that would take them to their destination.

Yslam became though, more convinced every passing moment that this mysterious hooded Glukkon would never arrive.

Though to his suprise, a taxi docked with the balcony and out stepped the Glukkon in the black hooded robes. He was accomponied by two personal slig body guards.

" Ah Yslam, we finally meet." The hooded Glukkon said.

"Greetings, I wish I knew your name." Yslam, said back.

" You can call me Molluck." He replied.............


What is The Glukkon's Relationship to the Molluck we all know, only time will tell, dont worry all will be explained, in the coming chapter, as well as what the truth is about the Glukkon moon.

And stay tuned for Derec's next chapter
Stay Tuned.


-Al the Vykker

CAN'T BREATH, SO GOOD.......

Nice Al I cant wait to read the rest:fuzsmile:

Chapter 11 Opening the Seal

The two Glukkons continued to talk on the balcony.

"You know Yslam, I think we should pay a visit to the Crypt beneath the temple." Molluck said.

"What? We cannot trespass on the spiritual place of our ancestors. Its just not right, I would be disgraced by my collegues. and all the Glukkons in the whole entire city of Mudarc."Yslam replied back.

"Why not, you do want to know the truth dont you."

"Well I guess,.....maybe I can say Im visiting due to religious purposes, Im sure they will not question me, I am the leader of the Glukkon High Council."

"Thats the response i was looking for Yslam........." Molluck told him.

The two entered an elevator inside the temple that lead to great hall, the main entry way of the temple. The ceiling was very high, and also many support pillars were alligned to the various locations throughout the temple.

They continued past the Mudokon Guard barracks, and came to a large Seal. Molluck waited with his black hood and robes still up, for Yslam to open it.

Yslam Kneeled down before the greatly intergrated and beautifully designed seal, and place his Key inside the slot. And turned it until the combination locked in.

The Seal had opened. and two torches on either side lit up, Molluck and Yslam both took one Torch and continued down the winding steps into the Crypt, and further into the Catacombs.

Along all of the wall were paintings, and writings, as well as hundreds of chambers, that infact went for miles underground as well as how deep this Crypt went down.

The two continued further, and deeper, and down further until they had reached the bottom. Two Glukkon Staues Guarded the Final Room of the Glukkon Crypt. It was now time for it to be opened............

Stay tuned to find out the truth about the Moon Molluck and what the final room contains.

And A note to the readers, after the next chapter, I will switch back to Derec's point of view for a while, until it comes time to switch again. So stay tuned.


-Al the Vykker

Nice Al I cant wait to read more.:fuzsmile:

Still kewl, keep going at it *Coughs-check out mine-Coughs*

Chapter 12 The Sinister Plot


The Final Room stood before Molluck and Yslam. Yslam put his hand up on to the final door, in which there was a Glukkon hand indentation. The room opened, and lit up. In that final room stood, a pedastool, in which a solitary neckalace laid.

Yslam began to walk towards it when he was thrown somehow by Molluck against the wall. Yslam struggled to move, but Molluck went towards the Neckalace in which underneath lied a scroll.

Molluck read the scroll to Yslam. And revealed that the moon that the Glukkons had worshipped for countless centuries, was in fact the in print of a mudokon paw imprinted in it.

Yslam would not believe it, but also it said this true the moon, is the shape of a mudokon paw, but on thee other side of the moon, showed the hand of a Glukkon, although do to the planet of Oddworlds size, when the other side of the moon is seen, it is not in view of this side of the planet.

Though Molluck had a much different idea, although the scroll, had said that both the Muds and the Glukkons if they were to live in harmony could both lead Oddworld as the chosen species, Molluck decided he would spread lies among the people on this half of the planet, and turn the Glukkons against their fellow Mudokons.

Yslam said he would have no part of it but in fact Molluck told him he would be, more or less. Molluck pulled down the hood over his head, and revealed a old deteriorating face, I need you to house my own spirit, you see I am as old as Good and Evil itself, and I need you to sustain me. Dont worry your spirit will remain here, unless I would be destroyed, which will never happen.

Molluck used some techniqe in spiritual projection and remove Yslams very soul from his body, and then entered. Molluck now Yslam stood, and took his black cloak, from his former skeleton, and sealed the room with Yslam's spirit inside.

He exited the catocombs, and witnessed, the sun rising. He still had the neckalace he had taken from the chamber, and also yslams neckalace, he put on his cloak and his now blue eyes, were seen while his hood was up once again. Then he resealed the catocombs, concealing what had taken place that night.

He saw instead as the sun was rising, dark clouds began forming, over the city, in which it became blanketed in a full eclipse. The walls and corridors, became dark, and something Molluck had planned was coming to pass, the necakalace he wore glowed silently, and he laughed as the darkness was falling. For it was time in which, he would spread lies and deceit amongst the people of Mudarc, and across half of this world.......


Look for the next chapter where I will switch back to derec.

Also if you have read ParamiteAbe's story about the lost continent, this also ties into the way that on that continent, the Glukkons were peaceful still but the muds werent, the moon explanation may make more sense, for that continent, is on the other side of oddworld and this where the mud moon is seen by Abe, is seen on this half of the world. Hope it makes a bit more sense.


Check back soon.....

-Al the Vykker

WoW Al what is there to say But.........WoW I like I like More More must have more

Im going to update my story when I get up tommorrow, hopefully along with Campaign Tour.

Though I do wondor why people dont respond to my Fan Fics anymore, it sometimes though irritates me when people say they dont like to respond after someone has a new chapter, and then turn around and continue to reply to other peoples Fan Fics after every chapter. Oh well people who are fans of my stories hopefully you will continue to reply and give me feedback.Thanks.


-Al the Vykker FC mod