Job Fan Fiction
This story takes place after the destruction of SoulStorm brewery. This is just a prologue to the rest of the story (which I have planned out), so if you like it, I'll write more. Ok, here goes.
Prologue - Who's Job? Hi. My name is Job, and I'm a Mudoken working for the dang Vykkers. I don't know where I am, but I don't like it. I don't like it at all. It reminds me of my old life at RuptureFarms. It stinks here, but not like the Farms. Here it smells like burnt hair and chemicals. The floor is real sticky, and it peels the skin off my paws. My knees and feet are raw from scrubbing so much. There seems to be a lot of scrubbing going on at this place, wherever it is. I don't even know what I'm scrubbing. That's because I'm blind. I wasn't always blind. I used to be able to see, back when Abe freed me. I could even see when I had my first SoulStorm brew. Man, that was yummy. Mm-mmm, I wish I had a brew right now. Anyway, once I had my first brew, the Sligs threw me into a cage and shipped of to the brewery. That sucked. Those shmucks took, me tied me down, and started lacin' up my eyes! I didn't even know what was happening! I think I blacked out. Anyway, when I woke up everything was black and I was getting whipped and yelled at. They gave me a pick and I worked for weeks. Then, one day I heard Abe and some other chumps at a Vendo getting drunk on the Brew. Abe was tellin' 'em not to, but they wouldn't listen. Poor shmucks. The thing that matters is I saw Abe... well not, really, but I heard him, and I told him to get us outta here. He said, "Ok, then follow me." So I said ok and started to walk forward. After a few seconds I realized my foot wasn't hitting the ground. I was falling! I screamed all the way down, the BAM. I was out. When I awoke, there was an alarm goin' off. I got real spooked and started running towards one of the trains (I had gotten pretty good at moving around without hitting stuff). I could tell there were no other Mudokens around, which was weird. Thinking nothing of it, I got on one of the trains and it started up. I was saved! On it's way out of the Brewery, there was a big BOOM and I fell. Again. When I woke up (again) I was in a cage with some of my homies from the Brewery. They told me that Abe had rescued everyone in the brewery. "Then why are we here," I asked. They told me they had been on the train I was on, and we weren't in the damn place during the Exoddus. Abe missed us! So I was pissed. But now, that's where I am, with just a few my homies (who are mostly blind) scrubbing floors with the Vykkers. END OF PROLOGUE That's the 'characterization' part of my story. If you want to hear the rest, just post and I'll start writing. P.S. If you didn't figure it out, Job is the blind guy from the FMV in Abe's Exodus. ;) |
Nice work, I'd like to read the rest.
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Yeah, that was a really interesting prologue, Kimon! Please continue with this soon because it's great! :)
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Thanks both of you, I'll start writing the first chapter soon!
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Chapter One - Job's Discovery
Well, one day me and my homie (who is also blind) were scrubbing up some scuz in the rafters outside a meeting hall of some sort. There we no Sligs around, and we heard Vykker voices, so we decided check it out. We snuck along the rafters into the conference room. I didn't fall cuz I was getting good at substituting my mind for my eyes and I could see stuff without really 'seeing' it. Pretty sweet, huh? Anyway, that's besides the point. We were in the room, 'looking' down upon three or four Vykker scientists arguing. "We can't go through with this! We don't have the freakin' funds!" "I know, I know, but this guy will practically pay for himself!" "We shoulda never started this! It was a retarded idea anyway!" "Don't make fun of the mentally disabled. They're people too." "Yeah well the... STOP GETTING ME OFF TOPIC!" "EVERYBODY SHUT UP!" It got quiet real quick. A big Glluckon stepped in. He started talking in a real authorative voice. Actually sounded kinda familiar. "You dumbass ain't even THINKIN' about quitin' the project, are you? Cuz if you are, YOU'RE ALL GOIN' TO THE SLOGHUTS!" All the Vykkers started shakin' their heads and apologizin'. "We're sorry, boss." "We didn't know." "I have total faith." "Yea me too." "Sorry Molluck." Yeah, that's right. Molluck. He's back. That's only half of this chapter, I'll write the rest in a bit. :) |
That was a good half-chapter. ;) I think you have the Vykkers' personalities downpat-the dialogue fit well with them because I could actually put it together with their annoying high-pitched voices and picture the conversation in my mind. And I'm glad you put Molluck in your story because he is one of my favorite bad guys in a videogame! Keep up the good work! :D
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Thanks for the support, oddchick. I'm trying to make the characters sound as much like they're portrayed in the games as possible. :)
Anyway, here's the commencement of the second half of chapter one: Molluck looked around at each of the Vykkers. "You all know what kind of trouble we'll be in if you don't finish this damn project, don't you? We'll be forced to live in friggin' holes, or even worse, mid-level housing! And if any of you decides to drop out, you're all screwed. But that won't happen, will it?" "Course not, Molluck." "We know what we have to do." "Sure thing." After that the dirty Gluk walked out. I was scared out of my brain. Molluck? Here? Now? What the heck?!? He was supposed to be a Glukkon crisp! I was so confused. Anyway, me and my buddy 'looked' at one another in horror. We both knew we had to get out. If Molluck was involved, it was bad news. My bud got freaked and started to run across the rafters to the exit. What an idiot! I knew he was gonna raise a racket, so I tripped him. Bad Move. He hit the rafter face-first. CLANG! "Holy crap, what was that?" "I didn't hear anything." "It's probably just one a those damn Ratz." "That's a HUGE Rat then. That was a loud noise." "Yeah, we'll have that one Mud take care of them. What's his name... Job, yea that's it." "Yea, whatever. Go call him. He's out in the hall." Uh-oh. End of Chapter 1. |
Nice way of finishing the chapter. :) It sounds like Job's in a lot of trouble, now! This story is really getting interesting early on and I can't wait to see what you come up with next! :D
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Okay. ;) I'll be waiting. :)
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LoL!! This story is hilarious! :D Can't wait for the next chapter...
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Here comes chapter 2. Enjoy! :D
Chapter 2 - Screwin' Around Holy crap. I knew I was in trouble. That Vykker was comin' to get me! I had to make a distraction, and fast. I looked around (by 'looked' I mean swung my head from side to side seein' stuff with my brain) and 'saw' one of the Ratz scurrying by. I snatched it real quick like and chucked into the middle of the room. I heard a big ol' splash. Then came silence. "Holy. Sh*t." "Son of a B*TCH!" "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!" "Is there a friggin' Rat in the vat?!?!" "We're soooo screwed." These screaming Vykkers went on for a while, swearin' and stuff. Actually it was pretty funny. Me and my buddy were giggling real hard. But at the same time, I knew what I just did was serious. I really screwed something up. Anyway, by now the Vykkers were starting to calm down. "Okay, okay. Everyone just take a chill pill." "Yeah, okay." There was a sound of a bottle rattling, and some Vykkers swallowing their meds. "That's better." "Yeaahhh.." "Okay, now who's gonna tell Molluck?" "Molluck?" "Oh crap, I forgot about him!" "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!" "We're screwed!" So much for the chill pills. But they worked it out. "Wait... he doesn't have to know." "Oh, yeah. We'll play it cool." "Hey, yeah! We'll just act like we did it on purpose." "Why would we put a Rat in on purpose?" "Shut up. You ruin everything." At this point the Vykkers started arguing again, and I think one pulled out a Snoozie. There was about five minutes of commotion before everyone fell asleep. Chuckling, me and my homie walked across the rafter and back to our posts, pretending like nothing happened. Man, that trip made for some good stories. As soon as the shift was over, we ran and told all our other homies. But I knew that something serious happened in that room. I really screwed something up. It wasn't the last time I'd be in there, that's for sure. END OF CHAPTER 2. I'll have another one soon! |
Ha ha ha! :D That was a really funny chapter, Kimon! It was hilarious with those Vykkers running around screaming and cursing! :D You have to put up more because this is classic!
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Ok, here comes the next chapter!
Chapter 3 - The X'periment Well, life was pretty boring for the next couple of weeks. Every once in a while there'd be a report of a slig falling into a recycler, which was always pretty funny. Those guys are punks. I spent most of the time talkin' to my homies and always scrubbing crap off the floor. I was going nuts with boredom! But the thought of what went on in that room kept me going. I had to get back in there, even if it cost me my life. So I waited for the day, and it came soon. The hallway around that meeting room was locked down so that the Vykkers could have another meeting. Sweet. This was my big chance. But I knew this time I had to go solo. I didn't want my buddies gettin' hurt. So on the day of the meeting, I told him I had an extra shift, and they didn't think twice of it. I sort of felt bad lying to my buddies, but that's how it goes. Anyway, I started walking over to the hall to check out what kind of security they posted. I was expecting acouple slig bouncers, maybe a popper or two. But what I got was different. I turned the corner leading to the hallway and I 'saw' something big there. I could sense it. It was two, no THREE big bro's! This was much more important than i thought it was! So I guess the front door was not an option. Luckily, those stupid sligs didn't do anything about the rafters. So I just climbed up and walked across. From what I could tell, the meeting was starting in a couple of minutes, so I decided to have some fun. :D I found some scrap metal on the rafter and chucked it down at the middle slig. Hilarity ensued. "Hey! What the hell?!?!" "What happened?" "Shut up! I know you hit me!" "What are you, high? How would I hit you, I'm way over here!" "Then it was YOU!" "Nu-uh! You're just so stupid you THINK you got hit!" "Hey, shut up, assface!" "'Jo Momma's an assface!" "Feel my wrath, you bastard!" "DIIIIEEEEE!" Then came a big old slig fight. Sadly, I had to get going, so I didn't 'see' the end, but eventually I heard some gunshots and the commotion stopped. Hehe. I chuckled to myself as I headed on over to the meeting room. I got there just in time. The last Vykker had just arrived. "Hey, you got the... uhh... stuff?" "You mean the stuff for the thing? Yeah, I got it." "Alright, put it in the place." "Ok, wait, just to be clear, we're talking about the Fuzzle DNA for the project and you want me to put it in the vat, right?" "SHUT UP! We're su-POSED to be talking in code!" "Oops. Sorry." So the last Vykker walked over to the vat and poured in some sort of vial thing. "Ok, lets get behind the sheilds and start the proccess." Sheilds? Uh-oh. Was this thing gonna blow up? I hoped not. Just to be safe, I found a box to hide behind. A Vykker voice popped up. "Ok, commence the cloning!" At this point a big humming sound started up, and got louder and louder as it went on. Suddenly, I noticed something taking place in the middle of the room, probably where the vat was. Something weird was going on. I sensed... life being formed. Huh, that's weird, I thought. Sunddenly it occurred to me. DNA, cloning, humming engines.... it all added up! They were making something. We were gonna have a new guy. And if Vykkers were making it, it was bound to be bad. I had to stop this proccess, somehow. So I came out from behind my box and started to run over to the edge of the rafter. Suddenly I wished I had that box again. Because that's when the explosion came. WHOOOOSHBAM! End of Chapter 3. Are you as excited as I am for the next chapter?!?! |
Yeah... Kinda! :) More! NOW! It's an order :P.
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I'm really excited! What happened to Job after that explosion? I just HAVE to know-seriously! :D That's why we need the next chapter-bring it on, Kimon! :D
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:fuzemb: Uh..........H,H,H,Hi...Uh I like the story,Keepup the good work. :fuzemb:
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Ok, I just got home, and I'm starting chapter 4.
Chapter 4 - The New Guy Ugh. Man, I was dizzy. I got up and opened my eyes. Hmm... I was still- Wait. What the heck? I just opened my eyes! Holy crap, I could see! Yes, yes YES! How did I do that? Where did the stitches go? Thank Odd I could see! Then I spied something that made my elation evaporate. Something big. Something scary. It was a monster. Luckily, it was sitting in the vat with some sorta force field around it, so it couldn't get me. For now. My thoughts were interuppted by screeching Vykkers. "Yes! Yes! It worked! It worked!" "Oh, it's beautiful! My beautiful baby!" "Group hug!" At this point the Vykkers all assembled into a disgusting purple hug cluster. "Finally, it worked." "Okay, lets make sure it turned out well." "Ok, fine." "Alright, here goes: Mudoken DNA." "Lemme see... yup, check." "Gabbit DNA from that can of Gabbiar." "Yup, that's there." "Fuzzle DNA." "Yeah, you can see it in the head." "Hmm, what else... Oh yeah, you got that Steef DNA Doc gave us?" "Look at those meaty forearms and tell me those aren't a Steef's." "Alright, then we're done... Oh wait. Is the Ratz DNA in there?" "Yeah, unfortunately. Look at that tail." "Oh well. It was almost a complete success then!" "Yaaayyy! Group hug!" Again came the purple cluster. Gross. I wasn't even sure what i had just heard. Did they combine all those things to make a new guy? I wasn;t sure I liked the sound of that. But it was part Mudoken, wasn't it? Maybe I could communiacte with it. I took a glance at the monster and shuddered. It sure didn't LOOK like a Mudoken. But then I saw it look back at me. It's glowing eyes (which it had gotten from the Rat) look scared. That was how it was communicating with me! It wanted me to set it free. I had just discovered the Mud in this thing. Well, I knew I had to set this thing free. But now wasn't the time. I had to go back to my station and talk to my friends before we could work something out. This would have to be a group effort. But either way, that little monster was not staying with those Vykkers. End of Chapter 4. |
awww.... poor monster... I hope Job can get it free :)... Anyway, i still liky your chapters. Keep em coming :D
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Thanks. :) There'll be another tomorry.
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Yeah, that was a nice chapter. :) And I hope the poor monster is set free too! :( Can't wait to see the next part tomorrow! :)
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Sweet! I like it!Keep up the work. :fuzwink:
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Sorry guys, I'm feeling sort of sick, so I'm not posting a new chapter tonight. Later in the week when my illness is all cured up I'll write the next one. See ya then!
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Ohno! hope you get well soon.! :fuzsmile:
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Great story Kimon.
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Get well soon, Kimon. I'm sorry you're sick. :(
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Ok everyone, I'm a little better, so I'm going to attempt the next chapter! Here goes:
Chapter 5 - Rescue Mission A couple of days had gone by since I had last visited the room. I had talked with all my buddies, and three of them agreed to help the poor guy. So this was our plan: After lights out, us four Muds would sneak up to the hallway outside the room. If there was security, we would take the rafters. Then we'd split up. Two of us would search the hallway and keep watch for any of the sligs. The other two would climb into the room and look for a way to free the new guy. It would be a lot easier now that I had eyes again. Yes! When the day came, we worked in the morning and afternoon like always, then when evening came around, we slipped out while everyone else was sleeping. Luckily, the Muds who were too scared to come said they'd cover for us if a Slig questioned them. So we were all set. The crew had two of my friends from the beginning of my life here, and one guy I didn't know too well. His name was George. We were all ready to save this guy. So we started towards the room. As it turned out, there was no security, so we just walked through into the hallway. Then we drew straws to see who had to go into the room. It was me and George. After we drew the straws, we started to climb a ladder into the rafters and jump down into the room (the door was locked). Once we were in the room, the new guy saw us from inside his steel cage. He was pretty excited. So excited, in fact, that he started howling! "No, no, shut up! You'll get us found out!" It looked confused, but stopped howling. Me and my fellow Mud looked at each other in exasperation. "Okay, lets look for a way to shut down this force feild and get him outta here!" "Okay." So we started looking for a key of some sort. But the new guy already knew what we needed. He pointed to a little console that said 'Voice Activation' and below it, a little bleeping sign that said 'Vykker'. This sucked. We needed a Vykker to WILLINGLY open this thing up. How were we gonna do that? While me and George were sitting there thinking, we heard something that made us wet ourselves. It was my buddies outside! They were screamin'! "Get outta there!" "Someones' coming!" "C'mon guys! Hurry!" After that we heard Mudoken foot steps running, and something even more horrible than the screams. It was a Vykker. "What the hell is going on here?!? If someone's in that lab, they're goin' down!" Me and George looked at each other in desperation as we heard the sound of a Snuzi getting loaded. What were we gonna do? End of Chapter 5. Whadda ya think? |
I like it! it's sweet!!! Please write moore!
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That was fantastic, Kimon! I love the suspense you put in your stories. I can't wait to see the rest of it! :)
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Yeah, i like it too :). Can't wait to see what happens next. ^_^
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Thanks guys. :D I'll probably have a new chapter tomorrow.
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ok... *can't wait for the new chapter*
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Aww... bless Job the poor guy...
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Sorry I haven't posted the next chapter, guys... my computer is broken and will be till Tuesday. I'm using my friend's comp to type this, so check out the story on Tuesday. :D
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Hey, it's alright, Kimon. :) We'll be waiting for it.
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I cant wait to see what happens!
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Turns out my computer is still broken, and I can only get on about 5 minutes at a time. Not enough to write a story, sadly. Maybe in a week or so...
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Aw man! Hope your computer is fixed.
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Yeah. We hope that your computer will be fixed soon. Until then, we'll still be waiting for that next chapter! :)
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Alrighty, after the long wait, here's chapter 6!
Chapter 6 - Revelation Aww crap. We were in BIG trouble. That Vykker was gonna kill us! We had to escape somehow. Me and George turned around and started bookin'. We didn't know where we were gonna go, but we had to find a place to hide. I was running for a spot I saw behind the vat when BAM! I nailed my head on a low-hanging pipe. Ouch. That was gonna leave a mark. Then the strangest thing happened to me. I started to black out, but something was different. I still felt like I was still awake. I though I was dreaming, but I could move around and stuff without waking up. That was weird. Anyway, I saw some figure in front of me. It looked like a Mudoken of some sort. Yeah, it was a Native! And not just any native. It was the Shaman! Then it dawned on me. I wasn't dreaming, I was having a vision! All of a sudden, the Shaman started talking to me. "Hey Job, you're in big trouble! You gotta get outta there soon! And that monster is more than just an experiment. Us Mudokens NEED that guy. So you and your buds gotta escape!" "Well, duh," I said. "How am I gonna do that?" "You obviously need some assistance. That's why I'm here. I have been sent by the Almighty Raisin himself to open a spiritual path for you. You must use the spirit chant to get out of there!" The sacred chant? I had no idea what that was. I knew Abe used it, but how was I gonna? My question was answered pretty quickly. A flash of lightning appeared in front of me and started shockin' my head! It hurt like heck, but it was over quick. "Now you can use your spirit to overpower your enemies," said the Shaman. "Now if you'll excuse me, my burrito is getting cold. Good luck!" It was about that time when I started coming to. It was as if not even a second had passed. I was lying on my back behind the vent, and the door was starting to open. I heard a Vykker yell. "Whoever's in there is about to be Fuzzle chow!" I heard the footsteps and I started to panic. I didn't know what to do! But then something inside me said: "Use the chant, Job. Use the chant....... RIGHT FRIGGIN' NOW OR YOU'LL BE A DEAD MUD!" So I started chanting. I didn't know how I knew it, I just did. The footsteps stopped suddenly. "Hey, what the hell? What's that? Hey... HEY! Aaahh!" Now it was time for some fun. :fuzmad: END OF CHAPTER 6. How was it? |