It reminds me of Dr. Nefarious.
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We got up, and I lifted the chair off me that was halfway burnt.
I looked out the smashed viewing screen, and I saw the Guru's camp.
I helped the other Sligs and two Vykkers up, and we stumbled out the door.
There was a huge Crater, with lots of scrap around the ship.
We climbed out of the Crater, and I checked we were all here.
"Were's Razor and Xowon?" I panicked.
I rushed back into the ship, and there, were the two Sligs, curled up, their sensors smashed and no heart-beat.
I cried, and remembered this was the Guru's fault. Every single Slig's deathwas becuase of him. My sadness turned to Anger, and I eyed the Guru's camp, and thought how to Kill.
I walked out, with the two Sligs over my shoulders.
I put them in my sleeping bag, and put the Sleeping bag into my backpack.
I started to walk to the Guru's camp, where the murder of the Mudarchers would take place...

I finnaly reached the camp, and took out my knife.
I walked into the first tent. There was a sleeping Mudarcher in there.
I walked towards the Mudokon, and stabbed the Mudokon.
The Mudokon winced, and a red stain apeared on the sheet.
I walked out into the next tent. This mudokon was awake, reading with a lamp on.
I ripped the book out of his hand. The Mud tried to grab his Spoocebow, I sliced his hand off, and then I stabbed him in his chest. A thick stream of blood poured down his body.
I heard footsteps, and then a sort of Robotic sound.
The Guru was coming, I had no way to escape.
I gulped as the Guru came closer...

Wow!! That was pretty gruesome, BBS.......and that makes a good story, IMHO. :D Anyway, the guru IS a bit like Dr. Nefarious with the whole robotic body thing.....only meaner and not as insane and funny!

The Guru stepped in, I cut through the tent and ran into the crater.
The guru sharpened his eye-sight, and focused on the gang of Sligs running past.
The guru raised his hand, and a beam of red energy burst out heading for the group.
It hit the centre of our gang, we ran past it.
The remaining Mudarchers started to shoot, while Ignitus hopped on the horse creature.
He went zooming out of camp, he picked out what looked like his Super-spoocebow.
He aimed, he hit Grunt on the pants, it bounced of and shot one of the mudarchers, now there were only two, I threw the last Grenade I had at the Mudarchers, before it hit the Mudarchers, it hit the Guru.
The guru fell off, the Horse hit the ground, the Guru got up, and walked up to his horse.
It was dead.
He really was going to start a war.
Again.

END OF CHAPTER 2
Sorry, this chapter is so short.

I only just started to read your story and I've got one thing to say: It's great :D. Keep it up!

We reached Spooceshrub forest, to find the bones of the Sligs that had died on the way there.
My fury rose again, I urned around to face, the one I was expecting to be behind me, the Guru.
He cackled, as I stared at the Guru's remaining Mudarchers, pointing Spooce-bows to their heads.
"Yes, Biggy Bro Slig, your friends will die unless, you must do this favour for me." He said.
"What's that?"
"Kill Lady Margret"

The hole of Oddworld stopped, even the planet stopped spinning, as the Guru unleashed his words.
I thought, I can't just let them kill my friends, I will have to kill her.
"Deal" I said.
The Guru smiled, as he always did before he did something.
The Guru grabbed me, and pushed me to the floor.
He shoved me in a tent, and tied it to an elum.
I was crying for help.
I was carried away into the deep woods of Spooceshrub Forest...

Those were some great couple of chapters, BBS! Your main character looks like he has a lot of difficult choices to make in order to save his friends! And I love your characterization of the Guru-he seems so cruel and heartless! I can't wait to see more of this story because it keeps getting better and better! :D

I had had enough of being thrown around in the Tent.
I picked up the blood-drenched knife, and cut a hole in the tent.
I appeared to be going past Magog Motors.
I jumped out the hole, and on to the bridge.
The Mudarchers and Ignitus didn't see me.
But the Elum did.
The elum stopped, and the Crew jolted forward.
They fell off and on to the Tent.
They felt nothing in the tent, and the Guru said " WERE IS HE?!!!".
I got up, and I ran to the Lake.
I saw the tip of Splinterz.
In ran through the trees, and stopped.
There was one problem.
The lake.
The bridge had been exploded.
I moaned "Why can't we swim?" .
Suddenly I saw a sign of hope.
A well.
I walked over it, and years of watching Mudokons catapult in them, I jumped.
It rejected me away, and I went flying over the lake.
I hit the ground, and got up.
I walked up and went through the maze of Lock doors.
I reached the doors, and went in.
I walked through the doors, and all the Sligs were cheering for me.
I walked into Splinterz's office.
There he was, with a voodoo doll of Abe and Munch, poking tooth-picks in it.
"Biggy Bro Slig, are you the only surviver?" He said.
"There are about 25 other Sligs, including my best friends, Slug, Grunt, Ziggy, Monty and Richey." I answered him.
"I sent off about 40,000 Sligs with Commander Rukkise, and you return with 25, not including Rukkise. And I have heard of Monty and Richey before, I will let them start their own Buissness, with their own building.
I smiled.
"Sit down, please." He said.
I sat down on a cumpfy chair, and told him the entire story.
"The guru, or 'Ignitus'-his pretend name." said Splinterz.
"What is his name?" I asked.
"Nobody knows, he's like Stranger."
I smiled again.
Splinterz whizzed round on his chair, and looked at the Security Video.
"The rest are here!" He said.
I smiled the biggest Smile I ever had done, and ran out the door.
I saw Slug.
I ran up to him and hugged him, and started to cry.
I saw Grunt and Ziggy, and did the same.
I walked up to Monty and Richy Etard.
"I could of never of done all this without you." I said.
They both Smiled.

I stood along with the 25 other Sligs, as Splinterz walked up to us, and gave us all Medals.
The Sligs cheered.
But I stood Silent, remembering the Guru.
I made a vow, that I would never die unless the Guru is killed.

:spin: :) *THE END* :) :spin:
Or so we hope...

I like the way you ended the story because it is set up for a sequel. ;) And the name Rukkise kind of reminds me of "ruckus", is that the word you were thinking of when you named the general? :D Great work, BBS-I can't wait to see your sequel! (if you write one!)

If you ever want a a peice of it, I've saved all this.
I'm working on the sequel.

Okay, BBS. Cool! :)

Biggy Bro Slig, I am currently making a new Website called Oddworld Forrest, may I put your story on it?

Yes!
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