Chapter 6 Rupture Farms


Jerec had made it to the place his tribe elders had spoken of .
The ground was very unstable. he entered a area of clearing as he climbed the cliff side. He looked on one of the ledges and found another sign reading:

StockYards, please feel free to pet animals.
Note: we will not be responsible for mutilation of your body.

Jerec climbed the last ledge and stood up seeing what appeared to be a train station. All these things he was remembering, from stories that had been told around the ccamp fires in Zarcyn. THe train was rusted and stuck to the tracks. Graffiti covered what was once a shiny new train. Jerec entered the stockyards and felt deju vu like he had been here before.

Images flahed through his mind of running and leapeing as trying to escape from this place. It reminded Jerec of his father, the Cheif never would talk about how he had died, almost if he was hiding something. Jerec had only slight visions of what his father was like. He was named a hero and a savior. But disappeared when Jerec was only three.

Seeing this made him continue until he looked upon the land on a massive facility spanning for miles and miles. it was a meat proccessing plant, was the biggest on the whole planet. Now eroded and rusted dark and damp what was waitimg in this massive complex, in the dark hallways, of the slaughter house?
Well Jerec was about to find out.

He opened one of the pipes looked once more at the sky dark and polluted wondoring how big this place really was. The last thing he viewed was a paper reading: wanted Abe. Then he decended into the facility.

Tommorrow Chapter seven will be posted. Stay tuned.:)

That is cool Al this is getting intresting. I can't wait to see six. Keep up the good work!;) I like how you describe Rupture Farms it's very descriptive.

Thanks! check back later tonight for Ch. 7.:)

The Fallen Temple
 

I also agree!

This is getting intersting! You describe the facilities and feelings of the characters so well!


Mudokon101...

I will post chapter seven tommorrow for sure. I just got back from a Jazz concert. Thanks Mud 101!:) :)

this is realy startin to get exciting

Al the Vykker's Fic
 

You said it!

I read this thing every time there is a new chapter....!!!!

Daj'a Vu: Great imagination Al the Vykker (or should I saw Vykker Facilitator) hehe


~Mudokon101...

Nice fic Al! Keep writin, ya little bugger.

I said I would read it, so I did and it was great! Keep up the good work...

Heres another idea: Why dosen't one of the next places be called Zanerkand

:lol:

The storys REALLY good though

hey weres the next part?:fuzconf:

It is on the way, I had a jazz band competition, and a solo competition today so stay around sunday the chapter will be finished thanks!:)

Chapter 7 Descent




Jerec made his way through the pipes in the dark. The pipes were musty smelling, not to mention the insides were eroded. He fell through a gap in one of the pipes and landed on a walkway.
he looked on the ground and a led sign was sparking, and was cracked all over. Jerec looked to the right of him and noticed hundereds, or thousands of unshipped meat barrels, all sstacked on top of eachother.

Jerec pondored on how many native animals were slaughtered
in order to make these snacks, and food products. He continued walking and found a skeleton of a mudokon with dried blood around it. It appeared that the mud was beaten to death. But Jerec also noticed something else, a body of a slig was mutilated in the corridor to the right.

Jerec then realized this must have been the Octigi, who did this. Jerec had another vision.

"Son, you must listen carefully I'm not really dead.. y.. mus... stop M...... before his plan succeeds......" I know this beacause your own chief did not want ... you to know who I really am...... Seek the light of truth and you will succeed."

Jerec wondored what this meant. Jerec entered the mess hall and saw the Octigi inside gathering bodies of Mudokons sligs and slogs. But what Jerec wondored was what was this for?

Once again, Nicely done!

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH I am lovin this story. Please write the next chapter as soon as possible. I cant wait any longer and i just read the last chapter.

I like how you describe the mutilated sligs and dead Mudokins. I can just imagine the terrible stench of rotting meat and dead Mudokins and sligs. Very disturbing and cool.:cool:

wow, spooky

Chapter 8 RUNN



Jerec Watched as the Octigi piled the dead bodies one by one, they were being devoured. Jerec looked away in disgust. As he was backing up he banged his arm on the wall and the Octigi turned their heads.


" GYUOQDOOASPAPSFJJFA!"
" ITKLDSFSDFJFIEERWter!"

Jerec had one thought on his mind:

RUN!


Jerec sprinted in the other direction as a flood of Octigi were chasing him down the empty corridor. For once in his whole life he knew what real terror was. He leaped over a railing and was falling. he grabbed a ledge two floors lower, while th Octigi were above him for now. Jerec pulled himself up slowly.

" Oh my Odd!"

Jerec witnessed something truly horrifying. A mudokon was standing in front of him but was not normal. It was a zombie that leaped at him. Jerec ducked and the creature jumped over him. Luckily this new creature had no real brains. Another followed by the flood of Octigi caught up with him as he took his slypth from the case and stabbed one of the creatures through the chest.

He continued fending them off until he reached a service elevator.
His only chance left! He grabbed on and pulled the lever and was on his way up. One of the zombie muds grabbed on but jereckicked his head and he fell down while his head was smashed into pieces.

Jerec looked upwards not entirely knowing what was up there, he could only hope what it was......

:eek: Whoa this is good!!!! could I help out?

Give me some ideas, I'll see if I can include them.


TO all: this weekend the story will be finished, and I will be starting my next fanfic.:)

All that I can think of!
 

Okay, Here's my idea: How about he finds molluks body?

Thats a great idea but, I don't want to ruin the suprise........


Check tommorrow for the next chapter.:)

I will PM you the ideas K?

those zombies sure sound nasty... by the way, wat kind of octigi is chasin him?

The Octigi 0.1 I will try and find the picture on my computer.

It's getting very fun Al I dident realise how close you were to the end of your story. I am excited to find out what is going to happen.

DOn't worry there is about four or more chapters left. I am hoping to finish the story over the weekend though. THe ending is gonna suprise you.;)



And Shrykull Master, here is the Octigi Picture I saved from Oddworldian.net
before it was shut down.

What's taking so long?

Mm, this story is better than what I first thought! Oh yeah, I posted here earlier... Let's just say, it's developed from good to better. Alright with you? Good.
Hey, zombies :fuzvamp:

I have been busy check back soon for the next two chapters.:)

Chapter 9 A light in the darkness



THe elevator conitnued upwards until it came to a halt. Jerec leaped across the small chasm and kept walking with his slypth in hand. His father was again speaking to him.

"You are very close...."

Jerec was now wondoring where this light of truth was. He entered a small chamber and found a dead slig lying next to a lever. The room appeared to be a prison cell with a meat grinder in the center. For some reason it felt like Jerec was here before.

He found something though, he looked at one of the walls that had been eroded so much that Jerec walked right through the opening. Inside he found a bird sitting right in front of him, but as he picked it up pain surged through his body and light enveloped him.

THe bird sent a wave of electricity onto his hands and burned two small tatoos on both of his hands. They showed two birds Identicle to eachother. Jerec began to Chant and a enormous light once again surrounde him but what he saw this time he could not even believe......

Wow that is awsome. I think I know where you are headed with this.:fuzblink:

ooo cool

Great story so far. I love it! I wait for the next chapter!
I wanna make a Fan fic one day........When I get ideas together.
I can't wait to see more!!!!!!!:) :) :)

i love your writing Al the Vyker im surprised on how good you did those chapters great job. By the way my story will be here shortly still working on it.

Chapter 10 Fate or Destiny?


Jerec could not believe what he was seeing, he remembered this vision as a child though it no longer was a vision.

" Hello Son... You have found the light of truth and with it you must walk the path of truth, in order to understand,"

" But dad I don't even know your name!"

" Do you think that is really what is important right now!"

" Well..."

" You might as well hear it form me now than having to wait years again, you see I am merely here in spirit form, to guide you.
It may be strange but I am far away exploring the other parts of Oddworld. So the Only way I can speak to you is when I meditate.
THe light of truth will help you on your way though to things that are invisible to the naked eye."

" Why are you exploring instead of staying here!"

" You see son I am the savior and chosen one of the Mudokon race, I have gathered three others My name of course Abe followed by Munch, and Sqeek who have been saviors of their own races, and we must find the fourth Nod. You see son are destiny's lie on differnt paths, but some day we will truly meet when the final hour has come. You must defeat the evil here then return to your village."

" But......"

" Your questions will be answered, good bye for now my son Jerec......"

With those words Jerec headed for the sub sections of Rupture Farms....

OoooooooHHH

(thats realy all I can think of to say)

Really good Al I
knew it was Abe. Loving this a lot!

Chapter 11 The darkest depths



Jerec had the spark of hope that his father was right and that they would meet in the future at the end. Though the though was pondoring the end? When was the end?

Jerec had climbed down twenty levels, and was now in the complete darkness he new without light he could not see, that was just plain common sense. So he chanted, and light sprang into his own eyes, and he could see clearly

He walked forward but what he discovered was he was at the bottom of the whole facility. He had know idea what to do. He sat down instead and began to meditate. He saw that he was above his body floating in the air so he journeyed back up stairs. His body would be sheilded for his time away.

With that in mind he went searching for the archives room inside the administration office. Being that he was in spirit form he walked right through walls. Jerec then went by octigi, but they could not see him. He eventually about an hour later discovered the archives and began his search for the map. Rows of books with dead glukkons with there slig body guards stood motionless as their rotten bodies decayed.

Lucky for Jerec he could not even smell the horrible stench. After searching for some time he used his telepathy to raise a map of Rupture Farms. He continued back to his body, but something had gotten there first..........

EXCITING! Dude. Thats pretty descriptive. I wounder what got to his body first?:fuzblink: :fuzvamp: