Those two chapters were good, Sliguy, but I do have one thing that I can point out. I was so excited that I was going to see Slaga in action when he was rescuing the Mudokons. I was thinking I'd see him battle with a few sligs (possibly even big bros), but it was just like "bam, you're all free.". I just think that this part went too fast. Not that it was bad, it was good, it's just that it needs to be a bit more descriptive. I don't want you to get offended, I'm just trying to help. :) Overall, it was very good, though. ;)

Please continue sligguy101! I really don't want you to leave this!

please finish! I like this story!

Chapter 16: Free spirits

Slaga had waken up yet again. He got his brown cloak on and equipped his gun. He had peaked in the main work room. It was full of sligs guarding the mudokkons. Slaga got the slig's attention. They all turned around. "Intruder! Attack!" Ordered a slig. Before the other sligs could shoot, Slaga had shot them. Another slig hid and called for reinforcments.
Lots so sligs came charging towards Slaga. They had tried to shoot him, but he was too quick. As he ran, he shot all the other sligs. When a big trio of sligs were killed, another big trio would come. Mudokkons hid, scared of what might happen to them. "Is this person crazy?" Asked a mudokkon. "I don't know." Replied another mudokkon. Slaga had grown tired, waiting until he could reach the entrance door and open it so he could free the mudokkons. He kept moving and shooting the sligs that kept coming towards him. "I will free these mudokkons, and you won't stop me." Yelled Slaga faking his voice.
Slaga had finally killed all the sligs. All of them in the factory. Slaga was panting, and was proud of himself. He reached the entrance and opened it. "Be free mudokkons!" He yelled in his loudest voice. He saw mudokkons rushing out the entrance to the forest. Slaga had waited for this day, and it was well worth it. He took off the cloak and kept watching the mudokkons run to freedom. All of a sudden, more sligs came. "That slig let the mudokkons go! Get him!" Ordered a slig. Before they could fire, Slaga was gone. He dissapeared without a trace. What was more worse was that there was not a single mudokkon in the brewery. Sligs were confused. They told Gertian about the news. He dropped his cigar and got out of control. "Send a patrol out into the forest! Slaga, you'll pay for this!" Screamed Gertian.

The sequal to Slaga's Story "Slaga's Faith" is coming soon

Great chapter! And it's perfectly set up for the sequel! I can't wait to read it-good job with this entire story, Sliguy! :)

Wow this is a really one heck of a GOOD story!

Then you should read the sequil "Slaga's Faith."

This is turning out great you have a good storyline!