Your rhythm and rhyme structures are horrifically screwed up.
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Thank you.
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Sorry, that was unnecessarily harsh.
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I'm going to participate too :)
I have no idea on a song so i'll try to help out with this one :p The "Hey!" is yelled by a Glukkon Dash past slig with gun, With the will to stay alive, This could be kinda fun, 'Cept you need to survive. Alarms and sirens ring, You set Mudokons free, But all those Slig guards bring, Is pain and misery! Oh, RuptureFarms, RuptureFarms, What a place to be, The shredder's gonna shred you up Like a low-grade Meech Munchie! "Hey!" RuptureFarms, RuptureFarms, It's really really big, See the sights and buy some bites, But don't piss off the Slig! "Hey!" Glukkons and sligs do rule, Mudokons tortured so. You would be quite a fool to not leave and go! Crushin' up the meat Puttin' it on the belt, Still the Muds get beat, While Slig cards are dealt! Oh, RuptureFarms, RuptureFarms, What a place to be, The shredder's gonna shred you up Like a low-grade Meech Munchie! "Hey!" RuptureFarms, RuptureFarms, It's really really big, See the sights and buy some bites, But don't piss off the Slig! "Hey!" Prototype by: Mars Mud. Edited by MeechMunchie, Mars Mud, Slig# 5719. I also had an idea to change the last two paragraphs: Oh, Necrum Mines, Necrum Mines The blind are led astray, Muds of old are forced to call, The one from far away! "Hey!" Necrum Mines, Necrum Mines, A group are on the breach, FeeCo trains run sole on gain, But watch out for that Fleech! "Hey!" |
lol, that looked like a struggle,
must......make.......Fleech...........rhyme! |
I can't quite tell where the rhyme and rhythm is messed up, but I'm not musically gifted, so I can't realy tell. I sung it, in my head of course, and it seemed fine.
I prefer the added "Hey!" though. I tried to imagine General Dripik singing. I kind of succeded.:D |
Fleech...reach? Beseech? Leech? Quiche?
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Beach? Preach? Speech? Peach? Teach? Bleach?
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MEECH!
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SCREECH!!!...pff...lol
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yep any of those, "a group are on the breach" just didnt seem related to anything
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It was supposed to be Abe and the other Muds breaking into Necrum Mines, but it wasn't that obvious. Screech might be better anyway:
Necrum Mines, Necrum Mines, Someone let out a screech, FeeCo trains run sole on gain, But watch out for that Fleech! "Hey!" |
Alright. Maybe someone could work on a jingle bell rock Odd-version?
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imagine a choir of mudokons, upside down in the tear extractors
we're in hell, we're in hell, we're in hell, Shock! maybe that doesnt work :D |
...Im thinkin off a SONG:D~!
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You really spent a lot of fucking time thinking this up didnt you!
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Jingle Bells, that Abe guy smells
the Glukkons ran away Oh what fun it is to ride on an Elum's back HOORAY |
err yes.
My part has been added, a funny mid story twist in the Fillin's Proclamation story thread |
Wrong thread...?
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Christmas. Want to help?
We're kinda low on people. Too many Scrooges... |
Cooked up a little thing :-) Hope you guys like it.
*First three images removed from post so I dont spam up your screen, look in the attachment tab for the other three. :-) Edit: Created an even better (In my opinion) version, check it out & please rate/comment haha!! http://www.oddworldforums.net/attach...1&d=1260986078 |
Saaay~, that's not bad! Good job!
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nice work on the pics tim
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Catchy perhaps, but generic. Get more lyrics and improve it.
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(sung to the tune of Poker Face)
Gotta save, Gotta save... Gotta save the Mudokon race! (He's running away from Sloggies) Gotta save, Gotta save... Gotta save the Mudokon race! (Watch out for that meat grinder) Ji-Ji-Ji-Jingle Bells, Ji-Ji-Jingle Bells, Ji-Ji-Ji-Jingle Bells, Ji-Ji-Jingle Bells. Edited to make it more xmasy |
@Tim C, those are really cool! Just like the quarma icons from MO :D
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Alex, how does that relate to Christmas?
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Thanks you Splat.
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Haha nice one guys :-P
And thanks for the nice comments haha :) |