Picking it up again. (honest opinions needed please!)

Right, so in art class, we're going to do some comics anyway, so now I have the time to slow down instead of barfing it out.

I'm completely dropping the old title since the failure at that other forums (I only use the term to confuse people from time to time, but otherwise, it's officially dead), and I'm also dropping the sort of random story thing.

So far, I have the characters down, and I started writing up a storyline for it. Because it's for art class, it has to be 25 frames or more, and the story has to be constant (no more random stuff). All I have to do is figure out how to do non crappy backgrounds, and different angles on characters (the only background i've ever done was in the first comic, and the angle experiment was done in the last one, as seen below). I know, the space pirate was from metroid:confusion, but I couldn't figure out how to draw it any other way.

Anyway, this is what I have so far...

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somewhere in the future, the year 2005...
-aw darn. We should have set the date further ahead. Well, anyway, the now famus bounty hunter samus aran has just completed a mission...

Ridley[in the background, dieing and screeching]
Samus[arm cannon smoking and standing triumphantly]

pirate1: *sigh*there goes the million dollar bird.
pirate2: We can re-build him! Stronger! Faster! Less explodie!
p1:Didn't we do that like, 5 times already? Now there's not enough of him to re-build.
p2: What about that part? Wait...no. That's something else...and it's leaking. Ew. Wait! AHAH! I found something! A toe!
p1: That's a dewclaw. The most useless of appendages.
p2: well, we can use it for something...right?
p1:hmmm... *throws at Samus*
Samus: Ow. Huh? A dewclaw?
Both pirates: space pirates strike again!

Later...[in the ship]
Samus: that was a less then eventful battle.
*computer beeps*
Huh? A message from the Galactic Federation? Another mission? The space pirates have another base?! Ridley?! I JUST KILLED THE- Oh, right. Cloning.

ELsewhere...[in the new base complex]
Ridley: and so I says to em', that's not motherbrain, it's a zeela!
Pirate1: You sure tell the best jokes sir!
*phone rings, beeps, some sort of notifying sound (I haven't decided yet)*
R:hold on I gotta take this...*presses button* Yo.
*jabber,static*
R: whoa, slow down there.
*static*
R: WHat?! What do you mean they blew up the death star! What the heck is an alluminum falcon?!
*KERR, jabber*
R: Wait a second, who is this?
*static*
R: Oh. You're looking for Palpatine. He's on line three. *presses button*
R: *sigh* Those storm troopers never learned to use a holo-phone.
Pirate2: [runs in] Sir!
R: What?!
P2: We have reports from our GF spies-
R: Well? Spill it!
P2: The hunter is on her way.
R: they found us out that quickly? I haven't even come up with a devious plan yet!
P2: As quickly as we built the place. Not to mention our completely predictable patterns. There's also all the flaw- AAAAAAUUGH!!
R: *toasts pirate*
R: any more dissagreements?
P1: nope.
P2: *twitch*
R: Good. Are there any reports on the cloning processors?
P1: Yes. Motherbrain is going as planned.
P2: *thud*

Somewhere in the complex...[kraids room, locked door]
Kraid: *sigh* nobody takes me anywhere. *looks through forth wall* What are you lookin' at me for?

Somewhere ELSE in the complex... [Engineering]

*pirate1 is on the console while pirate2 is working on motherbrain's controll panel*
P1:*looks to P2* What are you doing?
P2: replacing the intelligence chip...
P1: But I just changed that thing!
P2: Well, the last one spontaneously combusted, remember?
P1: Oh, yeah. Well, what kind of chip is it?
P2: A cross splice between a pringles and a lays, with skittles. I figured that if we put something completely stupid in there, she'll turn out to be intelligent.
P1: you know what? For some reason, that makes sense!

{Flashback}
Samus: SO this is it, huh? This is what those creatures feared so much. A cheerio shooting brain in a jar.
Motherbrain: WEAKLING! I HAVE THE POWER TO DESTROY THIS PLANET! I ALSO HAVE THE POWER OF IMMOBILITY!
Samus: You call that a power?
MB: ENOUGH! BEHOLD MY POWER! *starts countdown, alarms go off*
Mb:YOU CAN RUN, BUT NOTHING CAN ESCAPE IT'S DEVISTATION! NOT EVEN ME!
Samus: *already left*
Mb: MAYBE I SHOULDN'T HAVE CHOSEN THE POWER OF IMMOBILITY...
[PLANET EXPLODES]
{end flashback}

Pirate2: And if it doesn't work, we'll just dump her on Zebeth.
P1: then who'll lead us?
P2: I re-configured her clone. And this time, it won't paint everything pink with the sprinkler system.
P1: Don't let me guess...*grin*
Both: FatherBrain!
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That's all I have for now. so far, my estimation is about 50+ frames. I cut out the end scene beacuse I did it during art class, and it was rushed.

A lot of the characters drawn won't be used in the actual project, but in a series separate from the assignment. ANd uh, I'm still proud of Samus. Cause this time, I drew the whole thing! But, unfortunatley, now the oranges look like a dark red, and kraid looks like a fruit of some sort. And, some of the enimies have the wrong colors, because I had to do them without referances.

Please, tell me what you think.

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