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02-06-2017, 05:08 PM
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Oddworld A Sligs Rebellion (Fan Fic) Part 1

Me? Im a slig?
Should you run?
No, not just yet...
I want to change the cycle of hate
I want to help the mudokons
I gave myself a name, sligstein the III
Im a rebel
We will rise
We will be the storm
Together we will save the muds

Let me tell you my story

*ca chuck, ca chunk*

The sound of meat grinders rending flesh woke me up

"Ugh, another day in rupture farms"

Id been forced to work here and I didnt enjoy it

The mudokon slaves contuined to work quietly and solemnly

I knew what was going to happen to them, when abe first discovered the truth he ran and I chased him, I wanted to help, but I guess he thought I was like all the others

I confronted the glukkons
Told them it was wrong
That the mudokons were strong

They gave me a glare
Which made fear

"Get in line or we'll make a new snack in time"

So I gave up the fight and resigned myself to my duties

I stood up and walked along the archway id climed up to sleep on, I liked heights

I slid off the edge and down into the next room, someone wasnt very good at archtecture here but it made getting around a cinch

Some mudokons almost jumped out of thier skin, I gave them a grin, After all I want to be a friend to thier kin

They ignored me and went back to work, the *fssh* of the levers filling the room again

I turned and went to walk away when a red light above me started to flash

"Alert, alert"

"Abe spotted near the stockyard exit"

A group of four sligs entered the room

"Hey poo brain, lets get em' "

I followed them, I would help abe escape

We ran for what seemed like a lifetime till we came to the stockyards exit

Something wasnt right

A rock flew through the air and landed on a nearby bomb, some of the sligs were too close and limbs went flying

"Run" the remaining sligs screeched

A mudokon jumped out from behind a metallic pillar

I could see the other sligs were about to shoot

So I said "look out"

The mudokon crouched and in the other sligs confusion I shot them

The mudokon looked at me, slig blood covered the single loincloth he wore

"Hello, my name is abe"

And thats how our journey begun,
Your probably thinking "thats not what happened"
Well stories dont always have one character and people no matter what species don't always tell the truth
"But why didn't abe mention you?" I hear being asked

"Well" in the end I would betray him

Screams were the first things you could hear
the sounds of animals crying from fear, locked in their cages for all to hear

Paramites, scrabs and meeches too
I thought they were extinct and so did you

A lie we were fed to keep us in the dark
driving up sales to increase their profit chart

“This is terrible” I said to abe

He gave me a solem look, the pain in his eyes could make you shake, he looked as though he was about to break

“We need to set them free” I continued

“We can’t I need to flee”

He ran off and I gave chase

Screech

A scrab below us

“There’s a gap up ahead” Abe shouted

“Freeze” I shouted back

He stopped on the spot

A red beam from a seeker drone scanned along the pathway we were on

“We need to make sure it doesnt detect us!”

The beam passed over me and I ran closer to abe

He was standing at a ledge and below was a pit, of paramites and meehes having a fit, a scrab i could see was being torn, limb for limb and skin shorn

sceech

It teared and ripped through your veins, you could feel and hear the scrabs pain

On the other side of the pit was a crumling ledge
we needed to reach it and esacpe the dread

“c’mere” I said to abe
“Ill throw you, it’ll be safe”

So I heaved him up, for as you cannot see, a scrawny mudokon wieghs as much as me

With a heave and a grunt I threw him up, he drifted and fell right into the pit, oh my, this is the terrible bit

A mudokon has wrath that you cannot see and when he was done I wanted to flee

“I think I found a cave” he called from below

I jumped down and avoided the mess, this guy really wasnt like the rest

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02-07-2017, 04:30 AM
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Nice fanfic, bro. Would like to see more of this story
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02-07-2017, 08:01 AM
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02-07-2017, 08:05 AM
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Nice fanfic, bro. Would like to see more of this story
Thank you, I intend to write more someday!
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02-07-2017, 11:03 AM
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Very nice fic!
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This is pretty good, though I'd definitely suggest just making a new post if you want to add to the story. Makes it easier for people to pick up where they left off.
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02-07-2017, 01:39 PM
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This is pretty good, though I'd definitely suggest just making a new post if you want to add to the story. Makes it easier for people to pick up where they left off.
Alright, noted ^-^
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02-07-2017, 01:44 PM
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Yeah, the doubleposting rule doesn't apply in the Fan Corner when you add more art
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GOOD ONE!
Really good! ;D just weird reading some in the Slig's voice, but it adds to the charm...
oh... this slig is gonna die when management finds out (;u; )
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02-08-2017, 03:32 PM
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GOOD ONE!
Really good! ;D just weird reading some in the Slig's voice, but it adds to the charm...
oh... this slig is gonna die when management finds out (;u; )
Youll have to wait and find out
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